The Man Under the Bridge

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The Man Under the Bridge- Good Story- Abominably written

First Paragraph: "Whatever it was..." Not a sentence. Seriously??
Third Para: "I Sat in front of my hotel in Seattle, smoking..." should read "I sat smoking..." Very unclear and difficult to read and comprehend the way it is written.
Much further down: "As the greatest country on Earth, we churn our young through the meat grinder of war, bringing them home as damaged goods and then dragging our economic and political feet when it comes to fixing what we’ve broken." Seriously?? Bring them home... and drag our feet. Churn/bringing/dragging don't agree.
My high school english teacher would have eviscerated this story. You are writing for a publication... get a proofreader!! And learn from what they correct!!

Theresa more than 3 years ago

Man under the bridge

Lighten up, Tess.

Paul Kandarian more than 2 years ago

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